tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3462459107482092565.post3533371202229207853..comments2023-10-15T01:52:37.582-07:00Comments on Rambling Chicken: Vignette: HerringboneMarthahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06115821731964909442noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3462459107482092565.post-20310087509403083642011-02-10T23:31:50.341-08:002011-02-10T23:31:50.341-08:00Hey, Happy Dog! Thanks! And, glad you're back!...Hey, Happy Dog! Thanks! And, glad you're back! :) And, yes, I agree on your change; I'm going to go change that line. And I really appreciate your comments about the "wait" bits and the paragraph. I often fear that my short-paragraph addiction is a bad thing, and it's nice to have reassurance of times when it succeeds. :)Marthahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06115821731964909442noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3462459107482092565.post-82838578616902691112011-02-09T22:44:01.430-08:002011-02-09T22:44:01.430-08:00I love this. I especially love that I couldn't...I love this. I especially love that I couldn't tell if this was going to be realistic fiction or whether you were actually going to introduce the supernatural. And I was worried, because I didn't think it could end with any satisfaction for the reader. And with two simple words, you DID end it so that I was not only satisfied, but delighted. And I don't even use that word! Hey, is it okay if I just make one teensy comment? [Happy Dog imagines ChickenFreak nodding enthusiastically.] Okay. Consider arranging the second line thusly: "I mean," Emily said, "that yesterday...." I feel strongly about that, and I feel equally strongly that you should not change a single other line. Oh, and I LOVE the Wait. He waited. Wait. I am waiting. And I LOVE how they look on the page in their rightful individual paragraphs. <br /><br />I know I've been MIA for a while, and I'm way behind on reading your stuff. It's so much fun to read your vignettes. I'll be back soon! Hope you are well.Happy Doghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01956236998473734252noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3462459107482092565.post-623813469266138092011-02-02T22:20:58.666-08:002011-02-02T22:20:58.666-08:00Yo, Bacek! Thanks!Yo, Bacek! Thanks!Marthahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06115821731964909442noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3462459107482092565.post-38449629412557055532011-01-22T22:14:54.358-08:002011-01-22T22:14:54.358-08:00Yo, ladaisi! Thank you! And I'm always glad to...Yo, ladaisi! Thank you! And I'm always glad to have you stop by. :)Marthahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06115821731964909442noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3462459107482092565.post-6085421507779778962011-01-22T22:14:37.256-08:002011-01-22T22:14:37.256-08:00Howdy Christine! Thank you! I'm glad that you ...Howdy Christine! Thank you! I'm glad that you could see it. :)Marthahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06115821731964909442noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3462459107482092565.post-80162801988545188992011-01-22T22:14:05.996-08:002011-01-22T22:14:05.996-08:00Hey, Alex! Thanks! Someday, the novel may get done...Hey, Alex! Thanks! Someday, the novel may get done. So far, it's going veeeeery slowly. :)Marthahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06115821731964909442noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3462459107482092565.post-88239827513820353502011-01-22T11:32:45.859-08:002011-01-22T11:32:45.859-08:00You never fail to make me laugh by your wit.
I mu...You never fail to make me laugh by your wit.<br /><br />I much appreciate my weekly dose of Rambling Chicken.<br /><br /><a href="http://www.ladaisi.blogspot.com/" rel="nofollow">Ladaisi Blog</a>ladaisihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05348955254558187266noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3462459107482092565.post-92176869029344559922011-01-21T13:26:53.111-08:002011-01-21T13:26:53.111-08:00I just love this. I walked right out the French do...I just love this. I walked right out the French doors and down the path; I saw the flagstones then the bricks, even the moss. And the last sentence made me laugh. You go!Christinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04269469384082089761noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3462459107482092565.post-17982789337273662142011-01-18T16:29:34.080-08:002011-01-18T16:29:34.080-08:00I like this scene a lot. I'd love to see a st...I like this scene a lot. I'd love to see a story or novel that fleshed it out.Alex Washoehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03810893702064198273noreply@blogger.com